The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts present the variety of spoken
language
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languages
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among British
students
at one university in London in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, the percentage of British
students
who were able to speak another
language
went up in 2010.
In addition
, the Spanish remained most
commonly
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language
in 2000 and 2010. In 2000, it is obvious that Spanish was the most common
language
between
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British pupils, at 30
percent
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.
Then
the percentage of
students
who were not able to speak another
language
was 20
percent
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.
While
the share of learners that speak German only or two other
language
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was precise commensurate at 10
percent
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.
Also
, at 15%, the number of
students
who have another
language
or French was equivalent. In 2010, the proportions of Spanish, another
language
and Two other
language
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slightly increased
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percent
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for each one separately, at 35%,20% and 15% respectively.
However
, the pupils who weren’t able to speak any other
language
had
been
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significantly doubled and turn
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10
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. At the same percentage fell the
students
who speak French and German.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, students, percent with synonyms.
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  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
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  • trends
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