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Band 5

Writing Task 1: You wish to apply for a new training programme that is sponsored by your company. Write a letter to your manager: • Explaining about the training program • Explaining why it is important to your work • Requesting him for approving your time off Start your letter with Dear Sir/Madam,

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to explain about a new training
program
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 required for our
sales
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 team. It is a five-day
course
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 focusing on English language communication skills. The training addresses both speaking and writing skills of the participants with an exam at the end of the
course
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 to measure the skill level of each attendee. In the recent past, I realized that we had lost a lot of new
sales
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 opportunities just because of ineffective communication skills.
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 our
sales
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 group is well educated and holds degrees from renowned universities, I feel that they are not good at making proper
sales
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 pitch. Since it is a matter of learning, I believe providing training to the team will make a significant impact on their approach which will have
direct
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 impact on our company's growth. As I noted earlier, the
program
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 is a five-day continuous
course
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.
Therefore
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, it needs to be attended
during
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the
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working hours.
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, I had already discussed with
majority
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 of the team members and agreed with them that the
course
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 will be conducted over the weekend and continued through the week which means we will be attending the
program
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 for effectively 3 days during the working hours.
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, please be aware that the training
program
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 needs to be sponsored by the company and I am awaiting the fee details from the training provider. Once I receive the details I will submit
it
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 to you. Looking forward to your kind approval. Thank you.

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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