Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males and females from certain jobs because of their gender?

Recruitment based on the abilities of the employee is
acceptable
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tool among companies ,
however
, there is a misunderstanding in
this
issue that
have
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assumed the gender type is the valuable factor
to
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dividing certain careers which one is suitable for males or females ,so ,I will discuss
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the
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this
viewpoint and give my opinion.
First
of all, it is well known that the great chefs are
men
,but, many nations believe cooking is the responsibility of women ,
this
opinion will remove males from
this
job ,while ,the
strenghts
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strengths
strength
which are needed for making
a delicious meals
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delicious meals
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are creativity , high power in a sense of smell and taste ,at a result ,
exclusing
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excluding
men
from cooking is not a correct decision.
Second
, some countries have expressed the manager position must be more
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suitable
sutable
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suitable
for
men
than women ,because the policymakers think
men
have more authority and merit for
this
position that
this
view is common among patriarchial societies,while,reportedly some nations have been conducted
scientific
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study that female managers have shown more sympathy with their staff and better role model for encouraging their employees,at a result,
these
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instituition
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institutions
that have females on
head
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of
departement
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department
hav
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have
more successful than others,
however
,in the past ,
musclanity
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muscularity
masculinity
is a power to doing many jobs but nowadays the most percentage of jobs are independent to physical
strenghts
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strength
strengths
. To sum up, dividing
population
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with
wedge
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of
sexality
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sexuality
will remove persons who can play
an
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useful role in their community ,governments must enact rules to set equality on job
position
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for both genders.
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