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Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males and females from certain jobs because of their gender?

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Recruitment based on the abilities of the employee is an acceptable tool among companies ,
however
 , there is a misunderstanding in
this
 issue that has assumed the gender type is the valuable factor in dividing certain careers which one is suitable for males or females ,so ,I will discuss
this
 viewpoint and give my opinion.
First
 of all, it is well known that the great chefs are
men
 ,but, many nations believe cooking is the responsibility of women ,
this
 opinion will remove males from
this
 job ,while ,the strengths which are needed for making delicious meals are creativity , high power in a sense of smell and taste ,at a result ,excluding
men
 from cooking is not a correct decision.
Second
, some countries have expressed the manager position must be more suitable for
men
 than women ,because the policymakers think
men
 have more authority and merit for
this
 position that
this
 view is common among patriarchial societies,while,reportedly some nations have
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conducted a scientific study that female managers have shown more sympathy with their staff and better role model for encouraging their employees,at a result,
this
instituitioninstitutions
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institution institutions
 that have females on the head of
department
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the department
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 have more
successful
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 than others,
however
 ,in the past , masculinity is a power to doing many jobs but nowadays the most percentage of jobs are independent to physical strength . To sum up, dividing the population with a wedge of sexuality will remove persons who can play a useful role in their community ,
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 must enact rules to set equality
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 job positions for both genders.
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