Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males and females from certain jobs because of their gender?

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Recruitment based on the abilities of the employee is an acceptable tool among companies ,

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, there is a misunderstanding in

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issue that has assumed the gender type is the valuable factor in dividing certain careers which one is suitable for males or females ,so ,I will discuss

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viewpoint and give my opinion.

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of all, it is well known that the great chefs are

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,but, many nations believe cooking is the responsibility of women ,

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opinion will remove males from

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job ,while ,the strengths which are needed for making delicious meals are creativity , high power in a sense of smell and taste ,at a result ,excluding

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from cooking is not a correct decision.

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, some countries have expressed the manager position must be more suitable for

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than women ,because the policymakers think

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have more authority and merit for

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position that

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view is common among patriarchial societies,while,reportedly some nations have

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conducted a scientific study that female managers have shown more sympathy with their staff and better role model for encouraging their employees,at a result,

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instituitioninstitutions

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institution institutions

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have more

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than others,

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,in the past , masculinity is a power to doing many jobs but nowadays the most percentage of jobs are independent to physical strength . To sum up, dividing the population with a wedge of sexuality will remove persons who can play a useful role in their community ,

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and governments

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must enact rules to set equality

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job positions for both genders.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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262 words

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Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males and females from certain jobs because of their gender?

Fully explain your ideas

Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is often argued that it is difficult to get children to read. Why do you think this is? What measures could be taken to encourage children to read more? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think all university student should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people argue that modern technologies such as computers and cellphones destroy people’ social interaction. To what extent do you agree or disagree?