IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

Most high level positions in companies are filled by men eventhough the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50%female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain % of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#level #positions #companies #men #eventhough #workforce #countries #%female #women
The diagrams below illustrate how the Islip
centre
 will change from now to the future. As is shown clearly in the graphs, it can be seen that there are 8 significant changes made to the town, and the most significant one relates to the construction of a dual carriageway. When we look at the maps in detail, the main
road
 will be replaced by a pedestrian path in the future. In the south of the main
road
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 the current map, the park will decrease in size and a new housing area will be built
next
 to it. It is worth noting that the shops across the main
road
 and the school in the south-western corner will remain unchanged in the planned development. In the north side of the town
centre
, currently, there is a strip of shops along the main
road
,
however
, these will be demolished in the plan and
instead
Add a comma
,instead
show examples
 there will be new housing, a car park, a shopping
centre
 and bus station from east to west respectively.
Finally
, a round dual carriageway will be paved and encompasses the
centre
 of Islip, connecting to the main
road
 on both the east side and the west side of the
centre
,
as a result
, the countryside will no longer exist.
Submitted by 3071334368 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • workforce
  • mandatory quotas
  • tokenism
  • diversity in leadership
  • stereotypes
  • work-life balance
  • mentorship programs
  • flexible working conditions
  • maternity leave policies
  • holistic approach
  • cultural shift
  • sustainable gender equality
  • barriers to advancement
What to do next:
Look at other essays:

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!