The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart depicts the changing percentages of
the
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native
students
in the U.K. who have the ability to communicate in another
language
for the
last
10 years between 2000 and 2010. In 2000, British
students
decided to learn for communicating in a
second
language
around 80% of
students
and the other 20% are choosing to learn only their native
language
. most of them chose to learn Spanish
nearly
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third
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.
Secondly
, French and other
languages
are less than a
third
each. The
last
choice for learning is German and two other
languages
around one in ten each. In 2001, British
students
choose to learn another
language
for communicating in
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second
language
around 90% and the other 10% speak only their native
language
. Around 35%, most of the
students
decided to learn Spanish.
Secondly
, around 20% chose to learn another
language
.
Thirdly
, around 15% are learning to speak two other
languages
. The least
languages
the
students
are learning to speak are French and German.
To conclude
, in 10 years, the number of English
students
is
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decided to learn another
language
for communication rose gradually to around 10% from 2000. Most
languages
British
students
choose to learn as a
second
language
are Spanish and the least
language
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to learn is German.
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