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the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia. Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.

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 labour market's picture in different employment sectors of
Republic
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 of Freedonia.
First
 of all, we can estimate the main trend
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 1975. The ratio of male workers was higher
then
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 female for each of the industries. The only industry in which
women
 were at least equal to men was communications.
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, in 1995 the situation changed in a significant way. For the majority of
industries
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 there was a huge
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increase
increace
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increase
 of
women
 hired.
Moreover
,
in contrast
 to 1975, in
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 and retail sphere
women
 had achieved
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leadership above men.
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, well noticeable, that in public
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defensive
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defence
women
 made a great step and the gap
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decreased
descreased
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decreased
.
However
,
also
 there were sectors without any special changes: manufacturing and public non-
deffencive
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defensive
defence
 sector.
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