You are planning a trip for you and a group of friends to a resort in a foreinn country. Write a letter to the manager of the resort requesting more information. Your letter should include When you hope to be staying at the resort Ask for suggestions on activities to do Ask for advice on places to eat for both vegetarian and family friendly places

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing

this

letter to request more information about your resort that I am planning a

trip

with my friend in Sabah. I am planning a five days

trip

to visit Sabah

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26th November to 1st December 2022. We have 4 of us will come

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the

trip

together, but we prefer to stay in

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same room together. So

that

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apply

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, I am looking for a room with at least 2 double beds and

non smoking

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areas for our

trip

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your resort. As I know, Sabah is an island that has a good reputation

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for

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scuba diving. Could you please give me some suggestions

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the scuba diving school? Our budget

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around $400 for the lessons, but we would like to do two or three lessons and the other one day for beach activities.

However

, one of my friends that she is vegetarian. I am looking for a

vegetarian friendly

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vegetarian-friendly

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place to eat, and ask for

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some

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good advice. I am looking forward to hearing your advice as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Yumi

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

180 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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