These four pies show the percentage of men and women in different organisations with different working duration in each week in the UK in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts compare the proportion of two

gender

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genders

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in

different

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the different

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workplace

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workplaces

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with different working

hours

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weekly in the UK in 2014. From the overall perspective, 46 more

hours

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was the highest proportion of working duration in both

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organizations

organisations

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organasitions

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organisations

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except

the

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for the

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of

female

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females

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in private companies. In government, It is clear that 30% of male employees

works

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work

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for over 46

hours

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a

week

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, while the

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of that for female was 36%. The men

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who work

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work

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working

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less than 12

hours

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a

week

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made up 46%, while the

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for women was 45. 24% of the men worked between 13 to 45

hours

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a

week

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, 6% higher than that of women. In

private

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a private

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company

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companies

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, male employees who work over 46

hours

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a

week

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comprised 34% , almost 8 times bigger than the

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for

female

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females

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. the

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for

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a male

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male

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males

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who worked between 13 and 45

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was 3% bigger than that of

female

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females

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, whereas the

figure

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of

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for

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work between 1 and 12

hours

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for women was 33% bigger than

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that of

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of

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for

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male

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males

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