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The world is changing drastically over a period of time.The progressive growth and development of numerous sectors are influencing this change.Because of which, people can purchase the supplies anywhere in the globe. Im my view,this phenomenon has brought many positive effects than drawbacks which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.

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The world is changing drastically over a period of time.The progressive growth and development of numerous sectors are influencing
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 change.Because of
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,
people
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 can purchase the supplies anywhere in the globe.
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 phenomenon has brought many positive effects than drawbacks which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. Decades ago,
people
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 cannot buy international
merchandises
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 from where they
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.In order to buy imported goods ,they can do so only when they travel to other countries which
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 impossible to afford for many.
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, nowadays because of various technological advances and vast industrialization ,
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 trade has become the number one priority in all industrial sectors.
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inturn
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 influences the growth of the economy and the social welfare of every nation.To exemplify, it clearly shows that when the communities are able to buy the products from anywhere
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tremendous growth
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 the economic
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stand point
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.
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,the government gets benefited from the magnificent tax paid by these businesses.
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 can be
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extremely
extreamly
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extremely
 helpful in developing the infrastructure ,
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 transportation system,
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better
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 national security system
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 the country.
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,there are numerous other factors that
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 towards
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 side of
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 improvisation.One
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 aspect is
people
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 can enjoy using their indigenous products from where they are.
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, one of my friends living in Australia said she can get
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traditional Indian clothes and sweets from a market specially set up during the festival season like Diwali.
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 profound impact on
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 and export of commodities helps the society to remember their culture irrespective of living across frontiers.
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, many
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 invite their friends and families during their cultural festivals and share their happiness through
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delicious
deliciuos
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delicious
 foods.
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, the possibility to experience and explore everything from everywhere is beneficial. In conclusion, I emphasize these changes are better for the country as it creates many positive impacts
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te
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 society by means of enhancing the economic standards as well as building relationship between humans of various cultures and customs.

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