Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter- Suggest how you could help in her home- home layout, done degree in interior design, garden maintenance, cooking Say why you would like to do this work-social cause, love connecting new people, new ideas Explain when you will and will not be available-weekdays busy not possible, weekends will be there 10am to 5pm

#mrs #barrett #woman #lives #town #someone #home #hours #summer #letter- #home- #layout #design #garden #maintenance #love #people #available-weekdays #weekends #pm

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Barrett, I am writing

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your home, which was advertised

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newspaper on 30th June. Not only

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in interior design but

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5 years of experience. I think I can put my knowledge into good practice at your place.

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I am keen on gardening so I can do

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of outdoor spaces as well.

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breakfast and lunch. Despite of I am busy with my

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schedule, I love to help people for

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satisfaction as well as a

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of purpose in my life.

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people. As I am working in

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from Monday to Friday from 9am

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4pm. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Monica

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

179 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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