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Paying all workers the same salary in a company promotes harmony and respect among colleagues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
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 employed in different organisations and having the same wages can add to building respect and harmony towards each other. It can be a good decision in an ethical sense but it may have some undesirable outcomes. Many
people
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, nowadays, while working for the same company make different amounts of effort in their jobs or have worked harder for a better education due to which they should be offered the amount of money that they deserve.
People
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 working for different companies
work
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 harder every day to achieve higher wages and promotions which leads others to be inspired by them and put more effort into their
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.
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 leads to the development of a competitive environment which motivates and encourages other employees or colleagues to
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work
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 harder and achieve that higher wage. As an example, if a worker works for 10 hours and he earns more money than another worker working for 8 hours
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 it might
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 encourage that
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 to actually
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 for 10 hours.
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, if a
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 has worked harder in his life and gained years of experience
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 he should be rewarded for that hard
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 and should be paid higher than the rest.
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, if he is paid the same amount of money as the rest
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 he might not have any motive to improve and add something valuable to the company.
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person
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 worked hard and invested time to get a graduate degree yet is getting the same amount of salary as a
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 who is only an undergraduate
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 it is clear that the
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 with the graduate degree will not feel his worth getting recognised properly. To sum it all up, paying all the employees of an organisation may help to build relationships and respect between all the workers but it can lead to
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 who are putting in more effort or have worked hard getting underpaid.
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 it will ultimately be a bad thing for the organisation as a whole.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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