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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart above shows the different levels of past-school qualification rates in Australia, between
females
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 and males who held them in 1999. Ninety per
cent
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 of those who graduated from Skilled vocational schools were men and ten per
cent
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 were
women
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.
This
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 percentage was the chance of Undergraduate diplomas that dramatically increased in favour of
females
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, at
this
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level
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 Seventy per
cent
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 of Undergraduate diplomas were girls and thirty per
cent
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 were boys. At the subsequent,
level
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 fifty-five per
cent
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 of graduates were girls and forty-five per
cent
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 were boys
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 at that
level
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 proportion of men grew when we compared the previous
level
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 and the opposite rate of
women
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 declined slightly.
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 in Postgraduate diploma quota of man were sharply escalated but there was a significantly decreased in the proportion of
women
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. At, the
last
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 column views us that the Master’s degree rate apply increased slightly for
females
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 though the proportion of men was higher than
women
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. Of the sixty present graduates that males and thirty present were
females
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, cent, women, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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