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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting & reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting & reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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In 2010, daily
sport
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 activity
performed
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was performed
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 by
the
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a
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 number of Australian men and
women
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 who belongs
from
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to
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 various
age
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 segments. The bar graph depicts, the senior citizen which
fall
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 in the category of
age
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 group i.e. 65 and over there is
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a slight
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slight
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different
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difference
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 of 0.4% only.
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Overall
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 trend shows
women
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 are more
enthusiatic
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enthusiastic
 towards regular workouts in comparison to males. The females from
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age
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the age
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 category of 25 to 64 are the major contributors to physical activity. In
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contract
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contrast
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the
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apply
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women
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 of early
age
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 i.e.15to 24 are found to be less active when compared with younger boys.  In conclusion, that
women
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 are found to be more persistent in
morning
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their morning
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 active routine when
with
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than
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men's
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men
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of
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in
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the
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apply
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society.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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