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The table below gives information on average hours and minutes spent by Uk males and females on different daily activities.

The table below gives information on average hours and minutes spent by Uk males and females on different daily activities.
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the average
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 amount of
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on
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per day spent by UK
women
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 and
men
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 on various daily activities.
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,
it is clear that
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UK
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the UK
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 population spent more
time
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 sleeping rather than
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in other
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 activities.
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,there are
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noticeable
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 differences between the
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 spent by males and females on housework and employment/study. Looking at the data
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 detail,on average
men
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 and
women
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 in
United
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 Kingdom sleep nearly 8 hours per day.
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 large proportion of their
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 is leisure activities.Males spend 5 hours and 25 minutes
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doing different
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,
such
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 as watching TV or reading books,
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 females have 4 hours and 53 minutes of spare
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. Regarding the rest,it is
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 that
men
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 work and study on
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average more
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 79 minutes than
women
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 each day.
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,
women
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 spend 79
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minutes
mimutes
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minutes
 more than
men
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 doing housework, and they over twice as much looking after children
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