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The pie charts show the comparison of different kind of energy consumption of the UK in two years.

The pie charts show the comparison of different kind of energy consumption of the UK in two years.
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The charts illustrate various kinds of
energy
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 which were produced in the
the
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UK in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, coal and
gas
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 were the most
common
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 produced kinds of
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engergy
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energy
 in both years. In 1995, it was clearly shown that coal,
gas
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 and petrol were the most popular types of
energy
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 produced during
this
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 year. To be more specific, the
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figure
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 of those three
sources
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 of
energy
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 is relatively the same, at 29.80%, 29.63% and 29.27% respectively. It was
then
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 followed by nuclear, which was only allocated 6.4%.
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, only under 5% of
energy
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 was generated by other
sources
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 of
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engergy
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energy
. In 2005, most of the
energy
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 was generated by coal and
gas
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, in which, coal and
gas
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 shared the two even parts of 30.93% and 30.31% respectively. Petrol followed with around 19.55% of
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engergy
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energy
was
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produced.
Besides
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, nuclear only accounted for nearly a tenth of
total
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engergy
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energy
was
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produced.
Lastly
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, other
sources
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 of
energy
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 produced only 9.10% of
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engergy
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energy
comparing
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 to other
sources
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, engergy, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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