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The chart below shows the levels of employment in different sectors of the UK economy from 1910 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the levels of employment in different sectors of the UK economy from 1910 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how many
people
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 were employed in four major
industry
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 sectors in the UK from 1910 till 2010.
Overall
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, the service
industry
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 experienced the fastest growth — by the end of the period, it employed more
people
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 than the other three sectors combined.
In contrast
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, fewer
people
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 worked in agriculture, energy and construction, and manufacturing in 2010 than in 1910. Manufacturing was the dominant
industry
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 at the beginning of the period, employing over five
million
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people
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. It continued to grow until 1950 when it peaked at approximately eight
million
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people
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 before falling into decline. Its place as a leading
industry
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 was taken by services, which was the only sector that demonstrated a strong upward trend throughout the period.
As a result
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 of its rapid growth, it overtook manufacturing to become the largest employer by 1930 with just over 10
million
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 workers and exceeded 20
million
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 by 2010. With regard to the remaining two sectors, agriculture and energy and construction gradually shrank from providing jobs for approximately 2.5 and 3.5
million
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people
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 respectively in 1910 to under two
million
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 each in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, industry, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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