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Paying all workers the same salary in a company promotes harmony and respect among colleagues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it has been suggested that providing the same amount for all types of employees gives a homogenous atmosphere and higher social cohesion. Yet, there remains a contentious debate as to whether can
this
 phenomenon be a beneficial step or a destructive scenario. I partially disagree with
this
 topic and will propound my accordance
along with
 credible examples. First and foremost, there will not be a difference between all sorts of work.
This
 leads to the workers that they won't have competition, poor motivation, and there is a loss of bringing new innovation to upgrade the organisation.
For example
, in the case of one reputed company gets lower product sales.
On the other hand
, neither discrimination nor freeing people to work. Everyone gets an opportunity to learn at an equal level on a project. In ,addition workers own consider promotion.
For instance
, equally treated every one of them. As a way of conclusion, equality increases and the eagerness of learning new things decreases and leading to a lowering of the company.
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