The line graph below gives information about the rates of unemployment between 1991 and 2005 in three different countries in Europe. The table shows the percentage of men and women in the workforce in these three countries.

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A glance at the two graphs reveals the unemployment rates over 20 years and the proportion of the workforce with two genders in 1991 in three countries(
Spain
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,
Germany
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, and Italy).
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it is clear that
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Spain
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had an upward trend,
whereas
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Germany
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developed in the opposite direction.
Furthermore
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, the number of male workers was far higher than their counterparts in these countries. In 1991, the percentage of
Spain
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was by far the highest, at about 13%, which remained steady at the peak of 18%(1993 to 1995) ,
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fell gradually to its lowest point at approximately 9% in 2005.
By contrast
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witnessed a considerable climb, stood at 4% in 1990, and
finally
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peaked at over 10% in 2005, surpassing the rate of
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in 2004. Meanwhile, the proportion of Italy fluctuated between 8% and 12% throughout the period. Turning to the table, Italy held the highest male employment rate of 77.1%, compared to only 37.8% for women, almost reducing by 40%. (indicating a significant gap of almost 40%. )The percentage of male workers in
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and
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was 30% and 22% higher than that of their female counterparts respectively.
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