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The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
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The bar chart shows the proportion of
males
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 and
females
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 of different age groups in the UK that consume five or more portions of
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 per day in 2006.
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 represents the number of people meeting WHO's daily fruit and veggies intake recommendation. The graph takes 7 age categories into account: 19-24, 25-34, 35-44, 45-54, 55-64, 65-74, and 75 years.
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, for both men and women, the figures gradually rise from one group to another, reaching a peak at 55-64 years and decreasing
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 again. For men, the largest percentage of them (32%) consuming over five portions of
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 and
vegetables
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 are in their
mid-
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50s and
mid-
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60s.
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 is followed by those aged between 65-74 where 27% of them meet WHO's recommended intake amount. Surprisingly, the youngest
males
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 (19-24) have the lowest proportion of those that eat more
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 and
vegetables
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.
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,
females
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 consistently have a higher proportion of them that include more
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 in their meals, with the exception of those aged 75. As with
males
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,
females
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 aged 55-64 years too are most likely to surpass WHO's
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recommendation as 35% of them eat more than the required amount of
vegetables
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 and
fruits
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 daily.
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 is followed by those in their
mid-
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60s and
mid-
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70s where 30% of them eat the suggested amount. Similar to men, the youngest women have the lowest fruit and vegetable-eating population. In conclusion,
females
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 and
males
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 aged 55-64 are the most likely to meet WHO's
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recommendation of consuming five or more portions of
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 daily.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, fruits, vegetables, mid- with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced diet
  • fruit and vegetable intake
  • recommendations
  • percentage
  • males
  • females
  • age group
  • consumption
  • comparison
  • analyze
  • increase
  • intake
  • statistics
  • data
  • trend
  • healthy lifestyle
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