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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.
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The graph illustrates New
Zealand
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 import figures between 1994 and 2004 from
Australia
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 and
Japan
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.
Firstly
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, New
Zealand
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imports
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 from
Japan
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 were at 3000 in 1994
then
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 there was a sharp increase to approximately 6000 in the
year
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 1997.
In addition
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, the
imports
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 decreased to almost 4000 in 1999, but there was a slight increase in the
year
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 2000, at almost 6000.
Moreover
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, the
imports
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 fell dramatically to 2000 In the
year
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 2004.
Secondly
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, New
Zealand
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imports
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 from
Australia
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 rose to almost 6000 in the
year
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 1996,
then
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 they kept decreasing until 1999 till they reached 3000.
Lastly
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, there was a sharp increase in New
Zealand
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imports
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 to approximately 7500 in the
year
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 2001. But in the end, it reached 8000 million in 2004.
Overall
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, both
imports
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 from
Australia
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 and
Japan
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 started at almost 4000 million in the
year
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 1994, but
imports
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 from
Australia
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 were higher than
imports
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 from
Japan
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 in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, australia, japan, imports, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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