The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia. Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.

The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia. Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.
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The given graphs illustrate the
number
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of male and female employees in 1975 and 1995 in Freedonia. The data is divided into six employment.
Overall
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,
while
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the
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of
men
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in every employment was higher than that of
women
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in 1975, the
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of
women
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in some jobs surpassed that of
men
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.
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, each data was changed in different ways. By looking at the charts closely, one can see that
men
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had the largest
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of 850 in the non-defence public industry in both years.
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, since the figure for
women
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in the wholesale and retail trade industries increased from 650 to 850, it had the largest
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in 1995.
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, the
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of female employees working in the communication businesses rose drastically from 260 in 1975 to 550 in 1995, surpassing that of males.
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, even though more
women
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worked in the defence public industries
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fewer
men
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were recruited there in 1995 compared to 1975,
women
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(100) had a lower figure than male workers(200).
In contrast
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, the
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of individuals who worked in manufacturing companies remained the same in 1975 and 1995, 650 and 300, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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