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You have learned about an international job that is available within the company you currently work for and you want to apply.   Write a letter to the hiring manager. In your letter     Say why you are applying for this international position   Describe the job you are currently doing for the company   Tell him/her why you think you will be good at the job     Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam

#job #company #work #manager #position #sir #madam
Dear Sir, I am
writting
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writing
this
 letter to apply for the open position of cybersecurity consultant with the Canadian office of KPMG. I am currently employed in the same position in the India office, and I would like to
persue
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pursue
this
opprtunity
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opportunity
 as it matches my skills and competency. I have
also
 recently obtained my permanent residency
for
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 Canada, and I am planning to move there with
family
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 soon. I am currently working as a cybersecurity professional in the Risk advisory business of the firm. I help my clients to build cybersecurity
startegies
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strategies
 and infrastructure, and ensure compliance
to
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 security standards
such
 as NIST and ISO27001. I have more than 10 years of experience in
this
 domain and I am
also
 a certified cyber architect. Being a part of the same organization, I understand the culture and value system of the organization and I will be ready to deliver value to the customers from day 1.
Further
, I
also
 have extensive experience in
financial
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 industry where your team wants to expand its business.
Therefore
, I believe I will be a good fit for
this
 vacancy. Kindly consider the application. Looking forward to
hearning
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hearing
 from you on
this
. Yours
faithfuly
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faithfully
, Apoorva
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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