The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
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The graph indicates men and women in different age groups who consume more than five portions of fruits and vegetables in the UK in 2006.
Overall
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, people between the age of 55 and 64
years
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old accounted for the largest proportion,
while
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only a few young individuals between 19 and 24
years
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old have had sufficient nutrition on daily basis. On top of that, the number of men who achieved daily recommend consumption was less than women. In 2006, in the range from 19 to 74
years
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old, the population who reached the standard of daily nutrition consumption indicated an upward trend, the data increased from 15% to 35%, in which the number of men was slightly lower than women.
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, the figures between males and females were positively proportional.
On the other hand
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, those in the age groups between 55 and 75
years
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old displayed an opposite trend, in which females who surpassed 75
years
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old were 15% less than those between 55 and 64.
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