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You have lost something on a bus and called customer service to get help. You weren't happy with their response. Write a letter to the bus company manager. In your letter, you should: · describe the item you lost · explain why you weren't happy with the customer service · say what action you would like the company to take. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about an unhappy response I got from your customer service department for my lost item on a
bus
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.
Firstly
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, I would like to describe an Item which I lost during my
last
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bus
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 journey. It was my mobile phone. I sat on the
last
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 seat of the
bus
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, and I put it on my adjacent seat. The
color
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colour
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 of the mobile phone cover is Yellow, and there is my name on
back
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the back
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 side of the cover.
Secondly
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, the reason why I was unhappy with your customer service response is that I received no useful answers every time when I called them. They told me they look up into
this
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 matter and let me know soon.
However
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, it has been 2
week
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weeks
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,
yet
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and
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 I do not get any positive response from them.
Moreover
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, I went to your customer service office twice, but they did not even answer properly and told me to come
next
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the next
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 day.
Lastly
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, I would like that your company should work on
this
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 matter and will do some crucial steps for
this
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. I mean, your company can cooperate with the police, and find my lost phone
from
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in
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area
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the area
an area
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near by
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nearby
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bus
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 station.
Furthermore
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, you can search
its
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for its
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 location using my IEMI number. I am great full if you will do
this
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 task
as
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apply
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your first priority and I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Milav Soni
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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