The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of Fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of Fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.
The given bar chart highlights information about the
amount
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of vegetables and fruits which were eaten by both genders
with
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of
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different ages each day in the UK, in 2006.
Overall
, it can be seen that women ate
the
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high portion of these healthy meals rather than men in all age groups with the exception of
senile
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a senile
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group that consumed exactly the same amount.
According to
the data, in the youngest group related to women, the percentage started with 16% who were reluctant to eat healthy meals compared to other groups, and
then
the figure experienced a steady increase the following swarms and it hit a peak with approximately 34% in (55_64) gang. After which the percentage decreased to under 30% and
finally
stopped at 25% in the
last
category.
On the other hand
, the portion related to men experienced a steady increase from 15% to 22% in the first half of the period but
then
it soared to approximately 33% in (55_64) gang but
then
again fell
over
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25%.
Subsequently
, it remained stable
at
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in
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senile
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a senile
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group which meant that Middle-aged men
was
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more eager to swallow healthy food.
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