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Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. Do you agree?

#positions #companies #men #workforce #countries #cent #percentage #women
In recent years
women
 are
strongely
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strongly
strangely
 presented in different fields of
work
 but the majority of
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 jobs in companies are
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occupied
 by males .
However
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 more than half of the
work force
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workforce
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, which is found in some developing countries , are ⁰
women
 .
Subsequently
 , many people believe that it is essential that companies should allocate a
paticular
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particular
 proportion of
this
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these
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positions
 to
women
 but I disagree .
Firstly
 , I believe that only
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qualifications
qualification
 and degree of skills should determine who
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 superior
positions
 in any workplace .
High level
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positions
 affect
success
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the success
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 and durability of the company .
Therefore
 , it is very critical to
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rely
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 on any other factors unless
qulifications
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qualifications
, skills and
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precision
precisions
.
For example
 , if the
manger
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manager
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 of
company
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the company
a company
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 should choose someone to upgrade and get
promotion
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a promotion
the promotion
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 , he should choose him or her
according
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toaccording
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 how much are they able to benefit the
depatment
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department
.
Hence
 , I believe that if
this
 only the
measures
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measure
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 to determine who
deserve
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deserves
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 the position all employees will be satisfied .
Secondly
 , If governments embrace
this
 rule which
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owner
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owners
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 to hire
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a spacific
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spacific
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specific
 ratio of
women
 in superior
positions
 ,
this
 will
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create
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 an unfair
enviroment
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environment
 and allow for
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further
future
 discrimination and
unsatisfaction
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dissatisfaction
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 among employees .
In
addition
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,addition
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this
 will not be in the favor of
work
 .
For example
 , If the owner had to promote one of two employers he should consider the ratio of
women
 who are in
this
 position rather than searching for quality of
work
 .
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Consequently
, I believe that whatever the ratio of
women
 and men who are presented in
high status
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 only qualification should be considered . In conclusion , most
high level
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high-level
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 status in companies
are
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 filled by males despite
of
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apply
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the fact that the
work force
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workforce
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 in many developing countries is more than 50
percent
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per cent
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 female .
However
 , I
belive
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believe
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 that governments shouldn't dedicate a certain percentage of these jobs to
women
 because
this
 will not be in the favour of the company and it will create a trigger for
unjustice
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injustice
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 and
discremination
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discrimination
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender diversity
  • Affirmative action
  • Meritocracy
  • Quotas
  • Glass ceiling
  • Legal enforcement
  • Tokenism
  • Voluntary measures
  • Career progression
  • Representation
  • Workforce parity
  • Backlash
  • Historical imbalances
  • Corporate governance
  • Inclusive practices
  • Boardroom dynamics
  • Gender norms
  • Unconscious bias
  • Regulatory frameworks
  • Corporate ladder
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