The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration depicts the percentage of people that worked in Canada, South Korea and
Sweden
in 2005 and 2015.
Overall
, the significant differences happened in the employment rates of
women
, rather than
men
. Because the
number
of females in all three countries
have
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has
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decreased, but the
number
of employed males
have
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has
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increased in Canada and South Korea
,
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but decreased in
Sweden
. In 2005 approximately 60
percent
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per cent
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of
men
were employed and about 40
percent
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per cent
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of
women
.
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were.
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But
this
number
has changed
into
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to
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70
percent
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per cent
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in
men
and almost 55
percent
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per cent
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in
women
. In
Canada
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,Canada
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employment
rate
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rates
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of both genders have increased, unlike
to
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in
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Sweden
. Because
Sweden
in 2005 about 80% of
men
had a job and almost half of
women
were employed. The percentages have changed a little bit. In
case
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the case
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of
males
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this
number
has decreased to 70
percent
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, but the
number
of
women
that were employed
have
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has
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slightly increased to 50
percent
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. In South
Korea
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the
number
of employed
men
have
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has
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increased from about 75
percent
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per cent
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to approximately 80
percent
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. The
number
percentage of females
have
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has
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risen from 30
percent
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per cent
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to about 35
percent
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per cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, women, men, number, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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