The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. How to answer this task? Introduce the pie charts. Write what do they summarize. Write a general overview. Write in brief the main trends. Describe the first chart. Tell about the activities on the boys' chart and their popularity. Use linking structures and vocabulary to describe graphs. Describe the second chart. Tell about the activities on the girls' chart and their popularity. Use words from academic wordlist.
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INTRODUCTION:
The pie chart describes about the
boys
and girls cultural Use synonyms
activities
in Use synonyms
leisure
Use synonyms
activities
PARAGRAPH 1:
When they have Use synonyms
leisure
Use synonyms
time
spend sometime to other curricular Use synonyms
activities
those are followed basketball ball, soccer, reading, computer games, skateboarding, listing to music, gymnastics, netball, dancing.
PARAGRAPH 2:
The first pie chart tells about the Use synonyms
boys
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leisure
timeings Use synonyms
boys
are mostly spending Use synonyms
time
for computer games in Use synonyms
leisure
hours with the percentage of 34%. Use synonyms
Then
coming to the next activity they spending Linking Words
time
for 26% for basketball. Next like similar Use synonyms
time
Use synonyms
time
spending on three Use synonyms
activities
those are soccer and skateboarding 17% and 11%. Listing to music aggregate to 10%. Use synonyms
Boys
are spending less percentage to reading Use synonyms
that is
2%.
PARAGRAPH 3:
Girls pie chart gives the information in Linking Words
leisure
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activities
girls are spending Use synonyms
time
for dance 27%. 21% for reading hours. Use synonyms
Time
play games for 16%. Spending Use synonyms
time
for Gymnastics percentage of 11%. Use synonyms
lastly
netball and listings to music 15% and ,10%.Linking Words
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