The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. How to answer this task? Introduce the pie charts. Write what do they summarize. Write a general overview. Write in brief the main trends. Describe the first chart. Tell about the activities on the boys' chart and their popularity. Use linking structures and vocabulary to describe graphs. Describe the second chart. Tell about the activities on the girls' chart and their popularity. Use words from academic wordlist.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

How to answer this task?

Introduce the pie charts.

Write what do they summarize.

Write a general overview.

Write in brief the main trends.

Describe the first chart.

Tell about the activities on the boys' chart and their popularity. Use linking structures and vocabulary to describe graphs.

Describe the second chart.

Tell about the activities on the girls' chart and their popularity. Use words from academic wordlist.
INTRODUCTION: The pie chart describes about the
boys
and girls cultural
activities
in
leisure
activities
PARAGRAPH 1: When they have
leisure
time
spend sometime to other curricular
activities
those are followed basketball ball, soccer, reading, computer games, skateboarding, listing to music, gymnastics, netball, dancing. PARAGRAPH 2: The first pie chart tells about the
boys
leisure
timeings
boys
are mostly spending
time
for computer games in
leisure
hours with the percentage of 34%.
Then
coming to the next activity they spending
time
for 26% for basketball. Next like similar
time
time
spending on three
activities
those are soccer and skateboarding 17% and 11%. Listing to music aggregate to 10%.
Boys
are spending less percentage to reading
that is
2%. PARAGRAPH 3: Girls pie chart gives the information in
leisure
activities
girls are spending
time
for dance 27%. 21% for reading hours.
Time
play games for 16%. Spending
time
for Gymnastics percentage of 11%.
lastly
netball and listings to music 15% and ,10%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, activities, leisure, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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