The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two line graphs
details
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changes that occurred during the
period
that New
zealand
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Zealand
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imported from Austria and Japan. The line graphs show changes over a ten years
period
, the information in
two
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the two
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line graphs is very similar, which means that we can compare it. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that for a long
period
in both cases the
numbers
fluctuation,
although
, in the
end
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the
imports
in Austria went up sharply, in the contrast scenarios the
numbers
of
imports
from Japan in the end plummeted. As
illustrate
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in the second graph that
report
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reports
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New Zealand
Imports
from Japan, we can visualize that during the
period
of 1994
from
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1997 the
numbers
went up rapidly and the peak was in 1997 with more than 6000
of
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imports
million,
after
this
period
the
numbers
of
imports
had a
considerably
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decrease and in 1999 the
numbers
returned to rise,
however
from 2000 to 2001 the
numbers
had a several dropped. In comparison, the
numbers
of
imports
in Australia , during the
period
from 1994 to 2002 had fluctuations but in 2002 the
numbers
started to rise and the peak was in 2004 with 8
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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imports
. During a long
period
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,period
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imports
from both countries were fairly.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, numbers, imports with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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