The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below shows us the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in Canadian regions between 2001 and 2006.
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with the most international graduates is New Brunswick,
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in New Brunswick extremely increased from 7.4
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to 12% in five years.
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the percentage
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in Ontario grew from 2.6% to 6
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, but still the lowest. Probability in British Columbia increased exponentially by 7.5% for five years. The smallest growth was in Quebec by 2
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