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Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#employers #job #applicants’ #skills #qualifications
Many staffs hold the belief that academic
qualifications
 are less essential than social
skills
 in terms of job applications. I would argue that I fully disagree with
this
 motion
due to
 some reasons. First of all, there are some
jobs
 that require
applicants
 with a relevant academic degree to fulfil the position especially medical doctor, pharmacist, naval engineer, and many other
jobs
. These professions have
a
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great responsibility and high complexity.
For example
, doctors have to make a diagnosis of the patients and
then
 make a medical prescription.
This
 job could not tackle by the ones who do not have special
qualifications
 and formal degrees
in
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 medical doctors. The
applicants
 who do not have medical
qualifications
 would give a wrong diagnosis and prescription to the patient.
Secondly
, academic
qualifications
 would give
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adventages
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advantages
 to
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 the
jobs
. Academic
qualifications
 come with specific knowledge
for example
applicants
 from industrial engineering backgrounds would have some knowledge in financial
analysis
, market
analysis
, risk
analysis
, production process design, factory layout design and many other
skills
. All of these
skills
 could help the
applicants
 to make a good feasibility study report. Some
skills
 might learn through discussion with other competent and experienced staff, but it would take a long time and undetailed.
Thirdly
, social skill is one of the
important
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skill
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 in working life, but they could overweight the role of academic
qualifications
. Some
jobs
 could not be solved through negotiation and discussion.
For instance
, big data
analysis
 needs special knowledge of software operation and a good understanding of coding in order to transform big data into useful information. In conclusion,
after
this
 essay has manifested the aforementioned points, it can be reiterated that I fully disagree that academic
qualifications
 are less than social
skill
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 for job
applicants
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interpersonal dynamics
  • Adaptability
  • Teamwork
  • Networking
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Conflict resolution
  • Academic credentials
  • Technical expertise
  • Theoretical knowledge
  • Professional development
  • Career advancement
  • Specialization
  • Workplace harmony
  • Customer relations
  • Remote work
  • Digital communication
  • Job competency
  • Holistic assessment
  • Industry-specific skills
  • Work ethic
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