Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teaachers are undervalued and should be paid more specially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do How far do you agree? What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid

Some
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feel that workers like doctors and teachers should be paid more than film actors or company bosses. In
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I will give reasons for my answer to justify my opinion. On the one hand, I completely agree with the fact that hospital and school workers like
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or teachers must have higher
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. In my
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teachers
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example, give us useful knowledge and education. They spend their nerves , time and temper on students, only
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to achieve their goals in the future. It is so obvious why doctors should be paid much more. They save lives and rescue
people
from many
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of
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or
desease
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diseases
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as
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educated
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you should spend at least 20 years of your life.It is obvious that finishing medical university is not
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easy as some
people
consider. You must spend 60% of your daily life
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studying.
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company bosses are deserved to be paid huge sums of money. By saying that I mean that there is a several
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that produce so many useful
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nowadays. And
people
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those thing
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. As if it may sound strange,
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it is common to everyone, that film
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face many challenges like physical and other and
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traumas.
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dangerous movies can cause physical trauma
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horror films cause
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. It all should be covered by money. In
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I would say that there is no easy job in
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you always should work hard. It is not right to assume that some fields showed be
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more and others less.
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