Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teaachers are undervalued and should be paid more specially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do How far do you agree? What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid
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Some I will give reasons for my answer to justify my opinion.
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company bosses are deserved to be paid huge sums of money. By saying that I mean that there is a several Correct your spelling
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite