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Most employees do job interviews before offering position to a person. Do you think this is the best way to do it or are there better alternatives? What is the best method of choosing employer in your opinion?

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Introduction
These days, who give to the
occupation
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someone
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doing
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do
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person
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. Personally
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I believe that way to do it more than better.
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This
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In this
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essay I will
discussing
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discuss
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 the way about
befor
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before
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occupation
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 more than better to do discussing .
Body paragraph 1
Firstlly
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Firstly
, day by day individual
person
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have
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has
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 own
campany
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company
 behind
perants
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parents
.
Thay
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They
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want
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wants
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 to thek
others
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other
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 workers. But they
doesn't
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don't
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 know who are the
person
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 and
they
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their
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aducation
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education
adulation
. As an
example
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,example
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 they want to take
some one
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someone
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 to the
campany financiam
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company financial
 manager but they
doesn't
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don't
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a person
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person
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person's
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 education because of that they have to
doing
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apply
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discussing .
therefore
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 , who
konw
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know
 about
personallty
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personality
personally
 and education level.
Also
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 where they
living
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live
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.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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,
other
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another
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occupation
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is
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apply
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a
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apply
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need
to
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apply
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some
one
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apply
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supermacut
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supremacist
supercut
accunting
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accounting
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computer
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computers
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 and mathematics. Because of that who wanted to do should
be discuss
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be discussed
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about
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apply
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who computer
knowiedge
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knowledge
 properly.
Body paragraph 3
On the
otherhand
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other hand
,
someone
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 doesn't discuss and they
given
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give
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person
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 to the
occupation
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own
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their own
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campany
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company
.He will
makes
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make
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 many mistakes.Because they
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have
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has
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tohas
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 know
knowiedge
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knowledge
. They
dont
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don't
 know how to
mange
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manage
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 that. As an example
someone
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who work
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work
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works
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 in the
supermarket
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,supermarket
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 he
dont
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don't
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about
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apply
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how to
mange
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manage
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computer
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a computer
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. he cannot work
the
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apply
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at that time.
Other
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Another
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 reason , people
dont
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don't
 have much more time
spend
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to spend
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. That
the
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is the
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 reason people are not
comeing
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coming
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Conclusion
Inconclusion
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In conclusion
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, if
someone
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 will give
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occupation
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an occupation
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 they have to do
discussing
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discussion
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.
Beacuse
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Because
occupation
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difinitely
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definitely
 requires knowledge.
Therefore
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 ,in my
opinon
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opinion
 before
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occupation
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 they have to do discussing .

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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