The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.
This
line chart illustrates trends
according to
employment in the USA ( in
millions
) and expectations until 2025. As we can see, the
number
of people who tend to
manufacturing
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had mostly no changes in 50 years from 1975,
while
this
number
for services increased.
At
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the other hand,
this
number
for
argiculture
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agriculture
decreased
although
being the most in 1975. According
from
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the chart, from 1975 to 1980, the figure for both manufacturing and services trends increased, from 10 to around 40
millions
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million
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respectively. At the same time, the
number
of
argiculture
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agriculture
agricultural
trends jumped down from 80 to 40
millions
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million
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respectively. From 1980 to 2025, the
number
of people who tended to both manufacturing and
argiculture
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agriculture
decreased from 40 to nearly 10
millions
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million
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respectively.
Meanwhile
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this
number
for services bounded from 40 to 90
millions
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million
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and it will be the highest in 2025
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