The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

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line chart illustrates trends

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employment in the USA ( in

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) and expectations until 2025. As we can see, the

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of people who tend to

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had mostly no changes in 50 years from 1975,

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this

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for services increased.

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the other hand,

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for

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agriculture

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being the most in 1975. According

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the chart, from 1975 to 1980, the figure for both manufacturing and services trends increased, from 10 to around 40

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respectively. At the same time, the

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argiculture

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agriculture

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trends jumped down from 80 to 40

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respectively. From 1980 to 2025, the

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of people who tended to both manufacturing and

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agriculture

decreased from 40 to nearly 10

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millions

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respectively.

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for services bounded from 40 to 90

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and it will be the highest in 2025

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is a good idea for people to continue working in their old age if it is possible for them to do so. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.