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Most employers do job interviews before offering a position to a person. Do you think this is the best way to do it, or are there better alternatives? What is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?

Undoubtedly, every employee has to go through the
process
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 of a job
interview
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 before the corporation
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 them to the actual position in the company.
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, should we consider
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 way as a prior
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there are
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 other possibilities to think about?
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 my view on the best
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 with, every company or startups have a basic foundation of providing employment, whether through
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an employee
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employee
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overall
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 profile or taking various skill
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.
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,
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process
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also
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 known as the
interview
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, is based on individual resume profiles, their combinations of skills and so on. Which
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 by higher authorities by taking one-on-one interviews,
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 mapping the interviewer’s
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 capabilities.
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, these necessary steps ought to be taken for granting permission, either the attendee has a matched profile or
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 corporations are taking
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,
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 to
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, the government still to
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 in providing jobs to the community members. As
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we talk about alternate methods,
skill-based
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a skill-based
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 testing system, which includes writing, reading, and physical training.
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, many governments use
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 system to hire employees, because of the special quota in war, police or
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 require more force on physical training rather than a personal
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process
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, physical and common basic knowledge question exams would be preferable
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 providing employment chances for everyone but
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effective as an
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interview
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, looking from an
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 is a suitable option to hire employees,
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 physical exams or general knowledge tests are distinguished for other job fields. In my opinion, a job
interview
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 will be an effortless
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 and effective at the same
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 it will
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 portray
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the
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personality of the interviewer.

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task response
Plan your essay. Say your view in the intro, give two clear reasons in the body, and repeat your view in the end.
coherence
Make one clear idea per paragraph. Use simple links to show how ideas fit in the order you write them.
coherence
Use linking words to move from one idea to the next, for example: also, but, however, therefore.
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Give real, easy to see examples for each point. Connect the example to the idea.
coherence
The essay shows a clear intro and a closing.
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It tries to answer the question and gives a view.
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There are some good ideas that can be built on.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job interview
  • candidates
  • employers
  • communication skills
  • confidence
  • cultural fit
  • application materials
  • subjective
  • bias
  • skills assessments
  • practical tests
  • work trials
  • panel interviews
  • collective evaluation
  • technology
  • video interviews
  • AI-based screening
  • soft skills
  • reference checks
  • balanced approach
  • qualifications
  • character
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