The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Canadians in the age groups 25 to 35 and 45 to 55.

The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Canadians in the age groups 25 to 35 and 45 to 55.
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Canadians
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for the two age
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(25 to 35 and 45 to 55) that hold university qualifications.
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, the majority of
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Canadians
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are the degree holder in the field of Social Science and Arts
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they favour the least
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Others and
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field of
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. There is a slight increase in the proportion of Humanities field among the elderly compared to the adults. In terms of Administration
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, there is a decrease in the younger age group around 19% as opposed to exactly 15% in the older age group. Both sectors of Education and Science, Maths,
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indicate a significant decline in the
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degree holder percentage (15% to 13% and 18% to 10% respectively).
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, there is a substantial rise in the Engineering area of study from 9% in adults to 19% in the elderly. A minor decrease can be seen clearly for Nursing and Humanities
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from the younger to older
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which are 7% to 11% and 4% to 5% separately.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • post-secondary education
  • vocational training
  • bachelor's degree
  • master's degree
  • doctorate
  • diploma
  • certificate
  • professional designation
  • full-time education
  • part-time study
  • apprenticeship
  • continuing education
  • adult learning
  • educational attainment
  • workforce qualifications
  • demographic breakdown
  • socio-economic factors
  • statistical analysis
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