IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

The line chart shows fish and meat consumption in Europe from 1979 to 2004

The line chart shows fish and meat consumption in Europe from 1979 to 2004
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The line chart illustrates the consumption of fish and meat in Europe from 1979 to 2004. In general, it is clear from
chart
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 that fish consumption was the lowest in grams during all these years around about 60 to 45. Turning to
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the rate of lamb did not steadily go down from1979 to 2004 from 150 grams to 60 grams.
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, chicken consumption slightly increased by around 145 to 250. It seemed the highest rate in 2004 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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