You nearly complete your trial work period of two months and desire to become an official employee in the company. Write an email to your manager: Saying why you deserve to pass the trial work period Explaining what benefits you are able to bring for the company if passed Explaining what skills you should improve Stating your long-term career goals if your have an opportunity to work in the company Try to write a minimum of 50 words.

Dear
Mr.
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Jarvis, After two
month
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of work as a Software Engineer, I have learned and improved a lot of skills,
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and knowleadge
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knowleadge
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knowledge
about Magento. I really love
this
job so I write
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email to say that I really want to have a
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contract with
company
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the company
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. I realized that
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very suitable for
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job. I have 4 years
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with PHP so
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can learn very
quick
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with Magento. I can contribute to
company
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and improve my hard and soft skills. If
i
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can get the job
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will work very hard and do my best to contribute to the company. Thank you and regards!
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