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The graph below demonstrates the comparison of energy production in France for 1995 and 2005.

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The graph below demonstrates the comparison of energy production in France
for
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 1995 and 2005. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, in 1995 most energy was produced from coal and least from nuclear. In 2005 the stats stay the same, but the percentage
has
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changed.
Most
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 used
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 in 1995 is coal with 29.80 per
cent
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however
least
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 used is nuclear with 6.40%. In two thousand and five stats remained unchanged, but percentage increased and became 30.93 per
cent
, nuclear grew and became 10.10%. It can be clearly observed that gas increased by 0,68 per
cent
 over 10 years from 29.63% to thirty point
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 per
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. Petro decreased by 9.72 per
cent
 from 29.27% to nineteen point
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cent
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