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You nearly complete your trial work period of two months and desire to become an official employee in the company. Write an email to your manager: Saying why you deserve to pass the trial work period Explaining what benefits you are able to bring for the company if passed Explaining what skills you should improve Stating your long-term career goals if your have an opportunity to work in the company Try to write a minimum of 50 words.

#work #period #two #months #desire #employee #company #email #manager #skills #career #goals #opportunity
Dear Manager, I am interested in becoming an official
employ
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 of the
company
 after my trial
work
 period of two months. During the trial
work
, I have shown my skill and abilities by
completed
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 several tasks and projects that have
positive
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 contributed to the
company
. I was
also
 given
favorable
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 feedback by both colleagues and supervisors for my
work
 performance. If I pass the trial
work
, I will continue to
work
 hard and bring more benefits to the
company
. Examples that I can offer are creativity, innovation, adaptability and flexibility. I am eager to take on more challenges and responsibilities to grow professionally. My long-term career gold is to become a technical leader. To achieve
this
 goal, I need to improve some of my
skill
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,
such
 as security, user interface design and leadership skill. I hope that you will consider my application and that you will give me
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to become an official employee of the
company
.
Thanks
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Thank
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 you for your time and attention. Sincerely, Vinhdq.
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