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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison
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The pie charts provide
the
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data about pupils who knew how to speak other languages
as
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a
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additon
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addition
 to English in the years 2000 and 2010.
Overall
,
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 the beginning, the number of speaking
spanish
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Spanish
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 students was the highest and it remained
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the highest with a moderate increase in 2010
while
 the other languages did not show significant changes in the years 2000 and 2010. As
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can be seen from the illustrations,
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the percantage
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percantage
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percentage
 of
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students who can talk another language rose exactly 5
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in
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 the end of the period.
Additionlayy
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Additionally
, the number of French
speaker
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 increased in 2010. As the charts depict, the number of
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people who do not talk another language rather than
english
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English
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 decreased
in
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 the end of the period
as
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by
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 10
percent
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per cent
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 in the year 2010.
This
 10
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per cent
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is dividen
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dividen
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dividend
divided
 into as another language and French.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • converse
  • additional languages
  • language proficiency
  • monolingual
  • multilingualism
  • proficient
  • trend
  • significant changes
  • decade
  • notable increase
  • commonly spoken
  • comparison
  • data reveal
  • observed
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