The charts below show the percentage of males and females who worked in three different sectors in two countries in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of males and females who worked in three different sectors in two countries  in 2007.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the ratio of men and
women
from two countries working in three different sectors during 2007.
Overall
, the majority of Men and
women
in both countries are working in service. Ladies associated with
agriculture
in
country
A
is
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are
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higher than in
country
B
because a very less proportion of
women
are working in
agriculture
.
To begin
with,
An
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The
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average male working in
country
B
is
slight
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slightly
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high than in
country
A, with 65% and 56% respectively.
In contrast
, gentlemen aligned with
agriculture
are very high for
country
A as compared to
country
B
because only 3% in
country
B
and 29% in
country
A.
On the other hand
for Females, Almost all the
women
are working in service which is 88% for
country
B
and almost half of the
women
working in the same profession in
country
A.
However
, there is a sharp difference in females working in
agriculture
whereas
country
A stands at 43% and
country
B
at only 8%. There are no
difference
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differences
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in industry working type for both the countries with around 10%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, agriculture, country, b with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rates
  • percentage
  • sector
  • comparison
  • male
  • female
  • country
  • evaluation
  • trend
  • proportion
  • data
  • contrast
  • variation
  • labor market
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