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The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Canadians in the age groups 25 to 35 and 45 to 55. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the post-school qualifications held by Canadians in the age groups 25 to 35 and 45 to 55. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The figures demonstrate the after-school graduations in Canada between the
age
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 groups of 25 to 35 and 45 to 55.
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, it can be seen that in the cohort of 25 to 35, the number of
students
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 is twice as high as in the
age
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 range of 45 to 55.
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, most of the
students
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 have completed their degrees in the
fields
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 of Social
Science
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 and the arts.
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 the field of study
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 the
students
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'
age
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 range of 25 to 35. Here, four major
fields
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 of study have covered one-third (72%) of the
students
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. In detail, the subjects Social
science
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,
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 are 20%, administration, and education are respectively 19%, 15%, and
science
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, math, and computers
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%. The lower number of
students
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 have gotten admission in the subjects of engineering, nursing, MBA, Humanities and others, percentages are orderly 9%, 7%, 6%, 4% and 2%. In the second figure,
students
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 in the
age
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 group of 45 to 55 have found interest in the
fields
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 of social
science
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 and arts, administration,
science
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, math, and computers. The percentages are respectively 21%, 19%, and 18%. These three subjects captured almost 60% of learners. Apart from that, education is one of the largest
fields
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 of study, at 15% in number. And the rest of
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% of graduates are in the
fields
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 of nursing, humanities, MBA, and others, in chronological order: 11%, 5%, 3%, and 3%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, students, fields, science with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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