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In modern times, young adult are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

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In
this
 contemporary era, teenagers prefer to have their leisure
oftenly
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often
 with
friends
 rather than spending
time
 with families.
This
 change has occurred
due to
 several reasons,
however
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 children must be forced by their parents to invest their
time
 at home. Spending more
time
 with
friends
 has become a trend nowadays,
this
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 has happened owing to numerous factors. The prime reason is their same mindset as at
the
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 young age children are easily attracted towards things which
gives
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 them pleasure. There is an excitement to explore new ideas which encourages the juveniles to act together,
hence
 they tend to spend extra
time
 with each other. Another reason could
their
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teenager
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 phase which includes social development, mental health, physical fitness and so on. In
this
 phase of life,
youngters
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youngsters
 need companions with whom they can share their internal feelings and interests which they can not do with immediate family members, thereby in order to find peace and comfort in sharing their thoughts, they prefer to roam around with
friends
.
However
, it is vital to spend quality
time
 with family
also
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so that they can have strong
bonding
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bonds
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 with each other. As parents are the first teacher who
impart
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 moral values and
etiquettes
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in
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 them, teenagers must learn to respect and obey them. Families, especially parents not only always want
best
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 for their
offsprings
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 but
also
 support them in their critical
time
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times
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.
In addition
, young people must realise their responsibilities towards their homes since it would make them responsible citizens of society. There are many household chores that children must learn as it will associate them in their future.
Thus
, connecting with family more will give them learning experiences
which
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 eventually help them to survive in
this
 world. In conclusion, even though devoting
time
 to
friends
 has become a trend among younger folks as it gives them
freedom
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 to do their
wish
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, investing
time
to
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in
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 families will make them aware
about
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of
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 the challenges they will face in
their
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the
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 upcoming years.
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