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The chart includes information about the percentage change in the share of a international students among university graduates in variety Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006.

#information #percentage #change #students #university #graduates #variety #canadian #provinces
The chart includes information about the percentage change in the share of
a
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international students among
university
 graduates in
variety
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a variety
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Canadian
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 provinces between 2001 and 2006. Everyone can see
that
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the percentages of international graduates
of
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from
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a
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different Canadian
universities
.There are 8
universities
 with
a
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 greatest level of
a
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education
.These
universities
 are so popular in Canada.In 5
year
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,these
universities
 were more popular
between of
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among
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 students.
Also
,
this
 chart shows the most popular
universities
 with their
education
. In 2001,New Brunswick was in the first place in terms of
the
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education
 than other
universities
.That
university
 was more popular in Canada.
Also
,that
university
 was in the highest place in
two
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datas
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data
dates
.In 2001,Ontario was in the lowest index with its
education
.
However
,
this
university
 was more popular,too.Because even
this
university
 is amazing.Ontario was in the lowest index of
a
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 year. It is noticeable that New Brunswick was popular and greatest
university
 in 5
year
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years
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.
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