The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given chart shows the proportion of average consumption of fruit and vegetables based on gender and
age
group according to
the suggestion of World
Health Organization in the UK in 2006. Correct article usage
the World
Overall
, the figure for women
was higher than men
, except when they Change preposition
for men
grow
older.
Wrong verb form
grew
According to
the data, the trend of women
depict
a gradual increase starting from Correct subject-verb agreement
depicts
age
19 - 54 and reached a peak when they entering
middle Wrong verb form
entered
age
by 35 %. In comparison, men aged 34 - 54 remain steady in the vicinity of 23 %. Afterwards, as they get
older, Wrong verb form
got
women
showed less exitement
Correct your spelling
excitement
in
consuming healthy food Change preposition
about
whereas
the proportion plummeted to 25%.
On the other hand
, by age
19-34 men
proportion increased steadily from 15% to 20 % . Meanwhile, at Change noun form
men's
age
35- 54 was leveled off; however
, it bounce
back to 32 % when entering middle Wrong verb form
bounced
age
. Moreover
, as women
, the trend decreased when they get
older and shared Wrong verb form
got
similar
number at Correct article usage
a similar
age
75 by 25% respectively.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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