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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010 summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010 summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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The display charts shows the proportions of British student are one university in England who were to speak other
languages
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in addition
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 to England in 2000
as well as
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 2010. The data is on No other
language
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, German only, Another
language
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, French only,
Spanish
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 only and Two other
languages
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. In the year 2000, the highest was
Spanish
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 only with 30, No other
language
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 was 20, French only
as well as
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 Another
language
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 was equal with 15,
also
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 Two other
languages
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 and Germany only was equal with 10. In the year 2010, the highest was
Spanish
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 with 35, Another
language
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 was 20, and No other
language
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 is 10, Germany only is 10 , French only is 10 ,
Spanish
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 only is 10 and Two other
language
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 was
with
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apply
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10.
Thus
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, the highest
speak
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spoken
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languages
Fix the agreement mistake
language
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 is
Spanish
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.
The
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This
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 is
great
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a great
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 change.
To conclude
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, the above information is on 2000 and 2010. There 6
languages
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speak
Change the form of the verb
spoken
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 in England.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, language, spanish with synonyms.
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