The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

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The world health company suggest that humans should consume five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The diagram provides information about the percentage of gender in the UK by

age

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categories in 2006.

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the data , 15 % of

men

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eat five or more portions of fruit and vegetables per day by 19-24 young persons , women eat nearly

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2 percent more than

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. Ration in

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category by males is 20% and females approximately more than 3 % . Female domination was observed again ( 25 % ) above

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3 % in the middle

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group ( 35-44 ) . The percentage increase in

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who are 10 years older is not noticeable but the number of females

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increased by nearly 2 % .

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of older people ( 55-64)

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dramatically

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. In

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approximately 22 % to 32 % and in women 27 % to 35 % . In advanced years

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trend

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decreased . Males

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2 % and women are 30 % . In 75 , both

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consume the same percentage ( 25 % )

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the

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comparison , females eat more fruit and vegetables than

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during their life and only in elderly

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tendency is same .

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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The world health organization recommends that people should eat five or more portion of fruit and vegetables per day. The bar chart shows the percentage of males and females in the UK by age group in 2006.

1.Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries

Why is Indonesia moving its capital from Jakarta to Borneo?

There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

Some companies sponsor sport as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.