You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart illustrates about
age
of the staff that have been employed in the public sector in the UK for two years 2015 and 2020.
Overall
, the pie chart was divided into 5 subcategories with the range of their
age
groups.It is evident that the
age
group
between 21-30 remains the highest percentage of staff that are employed in the public sector in both time periods. In 2020,the
age
group
under 21 is not so great when compared to 2015 it dropped from 14% to 12%. Staff who are above 21 and below 30 found better in the public sector in 2020 there was a sudden jump from 23% to 33% which is huge.
Similarly
, the proportion of employees over the
age
of 40 climbed from 19% in 2015 to 28% by 2020. The
age
group
31-40 shrank drastically from 21% to 11%.
Similarly
to the people who are above 50.The
age
group
of 21-30 benefited the most the
age
group
31-40 faced more issues.
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